The ocean breeze rushes around my face as I run across the slippery metal bridge. I sit down carefully and start looking at the tiny fish. I see my mum reading and I gently slip into the icy cold water and see all the beautiful fish gliding under the water I start to drift to shore.
I hear people yelling “come on Maddi come on’’ I quickly float up for a breath. And go back into my swimming position and see all the sealife under me I drift down to take a closer look.
I swim back up to take another breath “ I’m nearly there. I run out and head towards my mum and explain what I did she says “good job”, and I run back to the water to play.
This is really good writing, well done Maddi. Keep on working on that punctuation and coming up with brilliant and exciting ideas to write about. Love mum. x
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